Should students have a part-time job while being in school (University or college?

Should students have a part-time job while being in school (University or college? Could you follow this structure of 5 paragraph persuasive essay (about advantages of working part-time for students) using my 3-4 sources, In-text citation (MLA) without Works cited page, please! ... and underline where it is in the essay text. It is need for EAP student. 1. Introduction 1.1. Hook 1.2. Background information 1.3. Thesis statement with 3 main ideas 2. Body paragraph 1 2.1. Supporting details 2.2. Evidence 2.3. Supporting details 2.4. Evidence 2.5. Concluding. 3. Body paragraph 2 3.1. Supporting details 1 3.2. Evidence 1 3.3. Supporting details 2 3.4. Evidence 2 3.5. Concluding. 4. Body paragraph 3 4.1. Supporting details 1 4.2. Evidence 1 4.3. Supporting details 2 4.4. Evidence 2 4.5. Concluding. 5. Conclusion 5.1. Restate the Thesis statement 5.2. Summarize 3 points 5.3. Why is it important? CLEAR and SPECIFIC